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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 3:36pm |
OKAY, so the application closes for the Bachelor of Midwifery degree for next year, in two days... here is my application essay so far (below). I haven't finished it yet but can you guys give it a read and give me any advice (if you have time)? Any constructive comments/editing would be appreciated 
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ETA: *essay removed - thanks for all your feedback!*
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 4:11pm |
I'm not the best person re.editing, but wanted to say that by the looks of things, you are gonna make one heck of a Midwife Jane! 
Good on you!  And I wish you all the very best 
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 4:11pm |
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I think thats fantastic! If I was deciding I'd pick you!
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 4:15pm |
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yes i think it is fantastic too
and you would make a great midwife
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 4:41pm |
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That is great!
I am also applying for Bachelor of Midwifery with AUT.
Who are you studying through, AUT have an informal interview scary.
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 6:40pm |
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 6:58pm |
that was brilliant...well said and well worded !:) I'd pick you too! 
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 7:06pm |
Great work!!
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 7:51pm |
Jane - I think it reads really well, the only thing that I would possibly add is something about this being your choice for a long term future career. Other than that I think its perfect!
Well done - I am sure that they will think you are a perfect fit, and you would make a fabulous midwife!
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 8:00pm |
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Excellent. Very well written. Go you!
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 8:22pm |
Sounds good are you applying at Otago? Im at CPIT and the programme is exactly the same, its awesome so good luck
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 9:13pm |
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Yup, applying at Otago.
Thanks for all the positive feedback!
Good thinking, SimSam, I will add that in.
And thanks for your PM, Freesia!
If anyone thinks of anything else, let me know!
You have all made me feel really good about it now, yay, that made my day (I was having a stressful one). U guys rock
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 9:16pm |
OH I forgot to ask... do you think I should leave the bit about PND in there, or take it out? Will it count against me do you think? It does say in the application that you have to declare any health issues including mental health... ? 
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 9:30pm |
Definetly leave it in Jane.. There is absolutely no shame and they won't let that count against you.
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 9:48pm |
I think it sounds great and I'd pick you also!! wrt the PND...I'd leave it in. It shows you are honest and not ashamed of it. It also means you will know where someone is coming from if one of your patients suffers too. 
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Posted: 27 August 2009 at 9:49pm |
Id pick you too Jane and have no doubt you will get in.
I say leave the PND bit in it shows you have experienced a wide range of complications for yourself and i think it will make you sound like you will have a better understanding of the experience your future clients will have.
Also if i get round to having #2 around the time you need to attend births feel free to come visit I think you will make an excellent midwife and would be happy to help in any way
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Posted: 28 August 2009 at 9:54am |
Very well written and thought out. I think you'll be a fantastic midwife!
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Posted: 28 August 2009 at 11:02am |
Awww, thanks guys 
I made a few wee adjustments, nothing major, and left in the PND stuff... and wrote a concluding paragraph. All ready to go I think. Now I just have to finish doing my CV and I'm all sorted.
Wrx, you are a sweetie... I would totally love to be involved with your 2nd bubs if the timing is right!
I got my first assignment back for this semester, and got a great mark - totally made my day since it was a very stressful assignment and I felt like I really rushed it. stoked.
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